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In the distance, I hear rumbling,
Like thunder, or a drum.
I can't tell how far away it is,
Or how soon it will come.
With the crackle of the closing clouds,
Comes a cleansing rain.
It washes away my every sin.
It rinses off my pain.
I sat down with God tonight,
He took his form in rye.
I looked at my creator's face.
I stared deep in His eyes.
The Lord said I had done him wrong.
He said that I had sinned.
I threw my head back and laughed.
The Devil in me grinned.
Well I looked God right in the eye,
And then, what I said next,
Really pissed Our Father off.
I knew I had him vexed.
"I have told so many lies,
There's no way you could know.
I like Hell's climate anyway.
And hey--
You should go."

------
Define yourself or someone else will.


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The following comments are for "Dear God"
by Beautiful Disaster

Insulting!...Ivor
Kirstin,

Insulting, you must be joking, this is a brilliant piece of poetry, I loved it, I loved the style it was written in, and I wish I'd written it!

This is the most light hearted, brilliant piece I have seen in a long time and I just love happy endings!

Well done and if anybody is insulted by what is a fabulous piece of humour, God help them. I should imagine God is splitting his sides laughing!

Very well done,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 18, 2004 )

What?
And God doesn't have a sense of humor now?
Like Ivor said, he has to be laughing...
This was an excellent write...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: June 18, 2004 )

Covering one's bottom line..
You know, not a lot of my work comes with a warning like that one.. After returning from my hiatus, I came home to find that lit.org was somehow changed. I found a member (or ten) who end their comments, God Bless, and the like. I thought, as I posted "Dear God", that some of these more fanatic Christians may be angered or put out by this poem, not hearing the humour. Thanks, everyone, for hearing that humour, and for agreeing that this topic CAN be broached in a public forum with disclaimers..

-bd

( Posted by: Beautiful Disaster [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )





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