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The man who waited for his
head
to split open
as if the actual end was formality
as if it was some law some rule in stone
you will follow your father
and his father in their insanity
and you will spill your memories
across vacant rooms
like the madmen in parks feeding
imagined pigeons imagined food
shouting the East. the East.
your naked father whose death
was contract, his days mere
formality. No roads back
to wholeness.






But clothes left
on racks, crops that failed.
whole bottles of whiskey bought
at the county line sitting in cupboards.
Stories flooded like fields and never reclaimed
Gone to forest.


------
I'd rather have permanent employment than be called fascinating


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The following comments are for "Field"
by wrdekle

Field
Fine writing, fine poem. The punctuation is a little uneven - sometimes you capitalize at the beginning of a sentence, sometimes not. Also, the linebreaks seem a bit haphazard.

This is a touching and powerful poem.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: June 11, 2004 )

field
This ranks way up there as the second best poem I've seen on this site (no, the best wasn't one of mine...). Your imagery is topnotch. Thank you for this beautiful poem. Please bring more.

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: June 11, 2004 )

I could weep..
I really do like you poems wrdekle. They skip my rational mind and fly straight into my soul. They are so silky to read, as if they were forming fresh in my own head as I read them... Just love them. good work! regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: June 12, 2004 )





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