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note: a bit of questionable language.



post-gig, queen street. the bars just closed.
the streets are flooded with glossy women.
they’re all yelping into cel phones.
they teeter on the arms of muscly thick-necked men
who call them “baby”, as in, “baby, you all right?”
or “baby, let me take that for you.”
or, “baby, come here.”

i steer my bike precariously along the sidewalk
through the crowd of men and babies,
watching the women’s painted faces slacken,
watching the wobbly white heels.
watching them lean out of taxis and vomit into their streaked hair,
into sewer drains.

cheeks like coffee filters: thin, white.
they pull urgently at cigarettes. so many tiny gasps.

and look, i’m down here, too.
we dress up for this, i guess:
for the outrageous cover charge,
for the ass-grab and the dirty look,
for the bathroom stall door slamming shut behind us,
for the taxi,
for the babies.

we dress up to undress, to strip down, to reduce.
call it a night if we crawl back to sniveling infancy,
mascara carving roads to nowhere down our faces.
pantyhose ripped from toppling over onto a beer bottle, the blood unnoticed.
oh smoky streetlamp cloud, keep us warm.

call it a night if the thud of the bass creeps through the lamppost,
into all those knobbly bits of your spine.
when all you can do is sit, and wonder where the fuck jimmy went,
and wait for the next cab.


------


ark



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The following comments are for "queen street poem"
by ark

made my night
ark~

This poem, in case you hadn't been told; rocks. It's urban poetry at it's best in my opinion. the imagery is astounding, stark and meaningful, and you can dance to it!

I'm envious, truly I am.

There are a few places I'd edit to be true, but they are only matters of personal taste.

Great job.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: February 12, 2004 )

bartleby...
this is my first stab at an urban sorta theme. enough with the fields and valleys, already! hey: i always greatly appreciate your feedback, and your work, too. nice to see you posting 'round these parts again.

be well.

~ark

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 12, 2004 )

wow
well, I wish my first stabs at things would be that great. Loved it.

( Posted by: Dew Of Blood [Member] On: February 13, 2004 )

saliva
thanks and thanks and thanks, you three. claire and pen, nice to see you back. and sure, yeah, saliva's always good, claire... except the kind you might find on queen street itself... ew.

there's so many poems to be found in this city i live in.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 13, 2004 )

Great ending
Liked the ending a lot including the expletive sort of sums it up.Well Done.
The first couple of lines are nicely used to create a image.This is good work.Congrats.

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: February 14, 2004 )

pleasant surprise
Hey ark, I actually went looking for your lastest piece and I have to say I am pleasantly surprised, although I don't know that I should be. You always seem to be able to describe those things that are out of reach. By stalking around the reality and telling us what you see...we understand what you're saying. Marvelous. As always, I'm jealous. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 17, 2004 )

darkshine & rightingit
DS: sweetest. thank you so much. so nice to know that i'm looked for.

rightingit: many thanks for commenting. odd that your rating doesn't quite match your comment. i prefer to comment rather than rate, so i rarely rate anyone's work: this means i don't particularly care, but it does strike me as strange.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 21, 2004 )

Fabulous!
Your comments in my recent rant inspired me to read your poetry. Thanks for the kind words. I think this poem is terrific, really rolls down that popping street I love so much!

"and look, i’m down here, too.
we dress up for this, i guess:
for the outrageous cover charge,
for the ass-grab and the dirty look,
for the bathroom stall door slamming shut behind us,
for the taxi,
for the babies."

~~you really captured the essence of Queen. I think I'm gonna have to post my own Queen Street poem tonight. I too write about Queen.

( Posted by: Zachary Martin Glass [Member] On: February 26, 2004 )

zach...
yes! the more poems about toronto the wild and frenzied, the better. i'll definitely watch for your queen street poem. mine might possible hit the press this year. we'll see. needs some tweaking, i fear...

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 26, 2004 )

jess, you rock!

thanks for digging up this old piece, and for your lovely comment. i wonder what made you go looking for it?

thanks for starting up the thread again; once this week's over i'll likely have at 'er. or 'im. does the thread have a gender?

~ark

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: March 19, 2004 )

Streets
Not much to add to the above comments - terrific poem. Gettin' on out there with the people!

Careful, you might turn into a beatnik ("Oh smoky streetlamp cloud, keep us warm.")

Just beautiful & insightful.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: March 30, 2004 )





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