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Author's Note:
WARNING; This poem contains violent images, and could be considered highly sacreligious. I did not intend it to be insulting towards religion, I apologize if you find it to be so. The images are metaphors only. If you feel that it may offend you, please do not read on.


I will drown you,
Your eyes bulging,
Your hands grasping
Desperately at the blood-slick floor,
Begging, for mercy
That you never gave me.
I am your mercy

I will drown you
In a red satin sea
Of forgiveness
So you can know,
As you taught me,
What it means to breathe nothing
But the life of another.
I am your mentor.

I will stand and watch you die,
Satisfied,
My wrists dripping
Like Christ dying
On a cross, nailed vulgarly;
Our attempt at redeeming
You from your sins
Is demeaning
I am your savior.

I will drown you and leave you
Dying.
Gasping- the iron taste
Of the communion wafer
Stinging on your tongue,
Oh, that familiar taste
Of blood.
Like Christ, I am your redemption,
My Blood is your baptism,
The death I gave is your religion.

------
She falls softly down from towering pedastools...


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The following comments are for "My Sacrifice"
by shefallssoftly

DEEPdrownedSacrifice
liked of missed, so glad I didn't, you hammered
this one...
~Robinbird~

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: April 5, 2005 )

Robinbird
Haha I'm sorry but I don't know what you meant by that last comment, I'm confused to if you liked it or not.
For someone who writes as much as I do, I have an inability to comprehend things sometimes.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: April 5, 2005 )

shefallsEXCELLENT...
sorry girlfriend, I have not commented enough on your work...I have much respect for your youth of innocents yet, so versed...You have read alot, or have experienced way too much for your age or are extemely intelligent...I am speculating all of the above...I see much greatness, just don't let it go to your head...
I have a feeling you will be just fine and it a complete pleasure to experience your evolution,
and plan to continue...
~Robinbird~

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: April 5, 2005 )





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